Hi Jessie,
In general, systems diagrams should focus on relation rather than icon. I see units, such as the elements in your last diagram, and I see variations, such as different factors impacting bee health, but I don’t see them put together in a way that is clear. Unit and variation need to both be present in each individual diagram; show how the unit varies over the parameter you are diagramming (time, location, species, etc.)
Graphically, use lines rather than fills. Your fills, such as the Venn diagram, draw a lot of attention, which may not be what you want given where the information is. Be careful of contrast – the yellow and white show up well against your background, but right now your divisions between diagrams (which you don’t really need) read much more clearly than your text (which is important.) Your color scheme would be stronger with just one yellow.
In the future, try to have a rough draft by Thursday. That way I can give you a more helpful review of the whole thing before you turn it in.
Hi Jessie,
In general, systems diagrams should focus on relation rather than icon. I see units, such as the elements in your last diagram, and I see variations, such as different factors impacting bee health, but I don’t see them put together in a way that is clear. Unit and variation need to both be present in each individual diagram; show how the unit varies over the parameter you are diagramming (time, location, species, etc.)
Graphically, use lines rather than fills. Your fills, such as the Venn diagram, draw a lot of attention, which may not be what you want given where the information is. Be careful of contrast – the yellow and white show up well against your background, but right now your divisions between diagrams (which you don’t really need) read much more clearly than your text (which is important.) Your color scheme would be stronger with just one yellow.
In the future, try to have a rough draft by Thursday. That way I can give you a more helpful review of the whole thing before you turn it in.