Finalizing our Proposal

We had a lot of work to do this week after we got feedback on the first draft of our proposal. Even though we didn’t want to hear the comments, we agreed with them and realize following the directions will help us create a more legitimate proposal. The biggest thing we need to take care of is getting more sources to add legitimacy to our argument. We decided to send out a 7-question survey to our classmates because they are the exact target audience we are looking for information from. The questions are directly related to what we are trying to prove in our proposal and we hope and expect to see answers that correspond with the ideas we are explaining in our proposal. We are making our proposal more specific to our point and I believe having evidence to fall back on will make our proposal more effective.

I am happy that I have been giving a lot of my own personal insight to the group in our ideas and they have been effective. This is the most difficult part of our proposal because we do know what we want to say, but we need to find the most effective ways to communicate these ideas. I have specifically been helping to organize our thoughts throughout the paper and make sure we are consistent throughout. We have worked to remove statements that include “we feel” or “we think” and instead input evidence that will bolster our argument.